Essay 1: In what ways may disagreement aid the pursuit of knowledge in the natural and human sciences?
This was in response to a 2013 prompt. I received an A for this essay, but it was not a very high A: about 33-34/40 as the connections in my essay were not made explicit enough. I managed to get a hang of this for my real essay, but it took me the full two years to realise what they meant by “explicit”!
A: 8 Use examples to make connections
B: 8 Better use can be made of the personal example
C: 9 KI are explored, counterclaims (could be more explicit) investigated
D: 9 Essay more obviously built around “disagreement” to give a better impression of overall structure
Essay 2: Guns, Germs, and Steel: To what extent does Jared Diamond substantiate his claim that the study of history can be pursued scientifically?
This was the first ToK essay we ever tried our hand at only about half a year into our course; it was a question set by our school’s teachers rather than the IB, so the format is slightly different. I received 37/40 for this essay which is quite high, but I think we should take this with a pinch of salt because inevitably first essays are marked leniently (and this didn’t adhere to the general style of ToK essay prompts, but it did give us an opportunity to review our knowledge of History and the Natural Sciences as AoKs, which were the two AoKs we had studied at that point in time). The comments and score breakdown are included in the body of the essay in the provided link.